Aoba47 ( talk ) 05:25, 26 September 2019 (UTC) Sorry about that. Adapted with armour plating and armour-plated glass - are 'armour-plated glass' Fleming's words? The 2nd is more interesting to me, though I struggled to figure out how best to incorporate. The co-ordinator should note my total ignorance on the subject, but the article strikes me as comprehensive, well researched and referenced, suitably illustrated and a surprisingly good read. Ref 3: The link goes to an abstract, and no page refs are given for the citations to the articleuld be helpful Ref 4: The page range needs proper formatting, per MoS, thus "pp. "Was" is gramatically incorrect.
Actually commonality says " using vocabulary common to all varieties of English is preferable". The league had planned to downsize Foxboro Stadium - could just be "The stadium it's clear which one we are referring. Thank you for your feedback. It would make more sense for this article to combine the release information into the "Development" section. Ive addressed the last of your points. Used your suggestion, but also happy to type out all 16! There's info about the Mirdasids' preparations in the third paragraph of the Prelude section and about Arab troop numbers in the fourth paragraph. If nothing can be done in principle to address the objection, a coordinator may disregard. TheAwesome Hwyh 05:59, 26 September 2019 (UTC) For this part "Go Vacation was revealed at the 2011 Electronic Entertainment Expo (E3 I would use "announced" rather than "revealed"..
It definitely helped me in a not so great period of my life. Or were her voyages actually international? I do not understand what is meant by the "contemporaries" part though. I think you are correct that this is an unnecessary self-reference, and I actually think putting the "See also" reference to the top of each section is not only unnecessary, but could lead to confusion. The impetus for working on this article was provided by the visit to Sudan of a photograph,. It was the habit of Hebrideans to look at all wrecks on their shores as bounty to be rescued from the being lost, irrespective of the niceties of the maritime salvage laws. First comment: The lead says "Fleming had based the actual character on the American gold tycoon Charles. All editors are welcome to review nominations; see the review FAQ for an overview of the review process. The reception section shouldn't have this much afterthought involved. Some pretty minor matters: the laid down date in the infobox isn't in the body and cited.
The article has large, detailed sections about "managerial eras" that last 5-8 years, isn't that a bit unbalanced in terms of coverage? I would imagine that all of the information regarding these release dates for different geographical areas and game systems should be included in the prose in the body of the article and cited there accordingly. Remember to italicize IGN for each instance. How about this, which should be more specific: "Extant macaws can generally be grouped in either large or small size clusters, yet the bones of the. SchroCat ( talk ) 12:34, 26 September 2019 (UTC) when he returned only 4 were left - "when he returned only four were left" Done - SchroCat ( talk ) 12:34, 26 September 2019 (UTC) but the. That's all I picked up on, on first read through. I forgot about lead requirements. Ah, the old metaphysical question of 'at what point does the ship come into being'! . (it's not noted yet that Goldfinger operates.) meet and play round of golf with - 'a' round? Below the preloaded title, complete the nomination page, sign with, and save the page.
Durch die Nutzung der Webseite erklärst du dich damit einverstanden, dass die Seite Cookies nutzt. I had to sequence them in a logical way, from the outside of the structure to the inside. Blue Pumpkin Pie ( talk ) 01:37, 28 September 2019 (UTC) Thanks Blue Pumpkin Pie - I've attempted to address all your concerns, shuffling and expanding much of the reception section. Definitely expelling him from Upper Egypt. I had put the ranges of the articles not the actual pages of cited passages; fixed Ref 2: you should give the publisher name (Livius) as well as/instead of the web address Didn't know hot to go about. Shuffled this sentence a bit. Done woops yes I seem to have mixed up the placed of the "Uncertain" mentions in the infobox. TheAwesome Hwyh 03:15, 26 September 2019 (UTC) "I'm late!
The wording could use a little more work, primarily the two verbing phrasing. Could you please check all of the longer citations to see if they could not be amended to only refer to the two or three sentences which actually directly support the material in your article which they refer. The disordered Byzantines, who routed in the ensuing engagement. I thought so too! This suggests that he died unexpectedly.".
EnigmaMcmxc ( talk ) 16:45, (UTC)EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 00:15, (UTC) Comments Support from PM edit I went through this pretty comprehensively at Milhist ACR, so I mostly have only minor grammatical points to add: in the lead, "and became the 59th (Staffordshire). IGN replaying the game many times doesn't add to the reception. It does need a section on this anyway. I think it's too much detail here; Guatemalan Revolution covers some. Josh Milburn ( talk ) 19:24, 18 September 2019 (UTC) identifying 70 previously undocumented species, including some new to science. ez "that were removed during the restoration of the temple" Which restoration, the recent one? As a (very rough) rule-of-thumb, each paragraph should end with a reference. Other citations to this source carry page numbers. Maybe see also at the top of the section would be better?
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